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May 3rd, 2007 - 05:26:36 |
Dapo Diamond
Miss tone blomhaug wrote this after a cross examination of the story script! she came out with some brilliant suggestions,this is the message she sent to the adminstrator.
Tone Elisabeth Blomhaug wrote:
Dear Oladapo Odemuyiwa!
I read the summary of the script[A], and I am very pleased. I love the idea,
and I am impressed about the creativity! A very good story!
First, I want to say sorry about the late answer. As you might know, the
school has been very hard lately, but i am soon finished with my exams.
When I read the summary of the script I was extremely happy, because I felt
joy knowing that there are people like you, caring for others. Keep up the
good work!
I loved the idea with Stella, and her family. It is great that nobody
supported her morally or financially. That she had no father affection or
mother compassion. When you look at the film, you understand that anything
can happen to anybody if they do not have anyone to care for them.
Compassion between people are very important.. Great job!
The story about John, who raped Stella is also a very intelligent way to
tell a story. Since he was persuaded by his older brother, you give the
moral about ignorance of young boys, who are often forced into the bad
envirnments.
There is not much to change in the story. It is great! But I have a few
suggestions.. But do not feel compelled to use my suggestions. The script
is alreaddy really good :-)
Suggestions 1:
You wrote that Stella was not very intelligent. But what if she was an
intelligent girl after all? Since she had no affection from her family,
maybe she put all her interessets in school, and therefore she got really
good grades. And that she was a hardworking student, with a lot of love
towards everyone else. Maybe she had plans of becoming a doctor or lawyer so
she could help poor people in the future? But since she had no family
affection, and barely no money, she was forced/persuaded into the
prostetution.
Suggestion 2:
Instead of Stella being not intelligent, what about John? Maybe he can be
less intelligent. You wrote that he was a cool headed guy, very brilliant,
very intelligent with a lot of aspirationsand that he could be easily
convinced. What if all that was true, exept being very intelligent. Since he
raped Stella, he would have to be as you said, easily convinced, but anyway.
No man can rape a woman just because his older brother said so. Maybe that
he was not as smart and did not always think of the concequences.
Suggestion 3:
You wrote in the end that there were four police officers, and that they all
were adult men. But what if one of them were a woman? Three male police
officers, and one female officer. Then you would at the same time, bring
equality between men and woman in the job market. Maybe it can inspire
girls/woman to take education within the policeforce?
But anyway. I am verey impressed by your work! It is a good story, and i am
sure it will help a lot of young people :-) Well done!!
Keep in touch,
Tone Blomhaug
Mar 25th, 2007 - 21:35:38 |
Dabal Bista
We have listened lot of about HIV/Aids. We have seen so many people are pulling and pushing into this poisonous well; someone due to unknown and someone due to known. But they are pulling and pushing day by day. The some people are conscious; some are working on it how many effective processes they are, we can only know when we can be among such people. We continue heard that “Prevention is the better than care”. To start any project and program about anything, first of all, we should be among such people so that we can find out proper causes why they are fall in such poisonous well. We should do such types of the homework.
We know the first school is for child is the home. First word learns from the home. First education takes from the home. We should find out why not our homes are such strong so that one by on person falls into such wicked death. We should wake up their parents, we should wake up family, we should wake up society, and we should wake country and at last world.
Let’s promise we will eradicate such a deadly decease from the world. We will wipe out any peril which push or pull into this death.
Jan 12th, 2007 - 23:06:15 |
Dapo Diamond
A new member has joined(Chukwu Chibuike)this is the letter sent to him on the 13,jan 2007.
Dear friend,
unbehalf of the products of blackrace family,i wish to congratulate you and again thank you for joining the rest dedicated members of products of blackrace who are keen on combating the global epidemic (Hiv/Aids)that is killing and cutting short the future of our most useful youths in the society,we are group of youths who have like minds in creating a change that affect our society positively and with a big heart to promote our race(BLACK RACE),we are not racists and we will never discriminate against any race but we will always do anything to carry our race to higher levels where all we be proud to say "We are all products of blackrace"Our first project in hand which is under progress is a play(movie),inside this coming play,we will be dealing with issues like Hiv/Aids,Juvenile delinquency such as rape,cultism,drug abuse,violence,juvenile armed robbing e.t.c and also to educate parents to have sufficient time for their children to teach some needed morals they can't learn in school.I congratulate you once more for taking a good decision that will affect your life positively because success and sadness depends on our Decisions.I will contact you again anytime,free free to bring any suggestions.
OLADAPO odemuyiwa
for Products of black race!
Jan 12th, 2007 - 22:09:34 |
Dapo Diamond
On the 2nd of December 2006 will be an historic day in the memory of the products of blackrace organization where we have our first gather- to- gether meeting at a whole with diginateries in attendance,amongst them is oluseyi oyebisi(IT membership coordinator for nigeria network of NGOs).In attendance were members of the products of blackrace organization where Views and Ideas were shared among them on how to go by their project(play)and the next steps to take.The meeting lasted for 2 hours and a positive progress was made.Kudos to Mr oluseyi oyebisi who organized the event very well and Ecwa nur/pry school who provided the Hall used.Thanks to God for making it a memorable day.
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